A SPOOKY Story

A SPOOKY story

For writing Mrs Clark my teacher, gave as another photo like she did last week, but this week was much harder. We had to write a story instead of a paragraph. At the start of the week when she gave as the photo my mind went blank. MY teacher showed us a web site and what a piece of good writing our age looks like. After we all had finished writing our stories we self assessed and peer assessed. Here is the picture, my story and the assessment.

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

Midnight Murder
One Grey misty night on Halloween, My friend and I was walking on our last street. We were trick or treaty, my friend Jesabell spotted a creepy abandoned school I told my friend we should go in but Jesabell was scared “There ccould be ggghosts” said Jesabell,  I told her ghosts aren't real and she was being ridiculous but I was soon to learn… I went into the school, Jesabell being a scaredy cat followed me, as soon as we took a step into the school CREEK!!   “ WWhat was ttthat” Whispered Jesabell in a scared voice “ Don’t be a big baby it’s just the floor silly” I told her.

 In the coiner of a room with only one whitish old fashioned wooden chair in it was an even older grandfather clock. The clock strikes 12 DING!!  I hear a faint scream behind me. I looked around Jesabell was nowhere to be seen. All I could hear was an crackly evil laugh  HA HA HA!!  I turned around blackness fell that is all I ever saw again…   

SELF ASSESSMENT

Things I think I have done well are:

A variety of punctuation

Used great adjectives

Painting a good picture in the reader's mind

What I think I need to work on

Make all my words and sentences make sense

Pear assessment

I think you have you great adjectives

And a great start for a story  

And made it really interesting like perhaps this sentence was good

One Grey misty night on Halloween

 But Next time you could make have a little bit more sense

And a bit more nouns verbs and adverbs

But otherwise it was great.

A Boat Story

A Boat Story

For writing on Tuesday my Teacher gave us a photo and we had to use our imagination to write a paragraph. Then we had to high light all of our adjectives,nouns,verbs and adverbs in different colours here is the WALT, photo and my paragraph.

WALT:  Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers

My Paragraph

One Cold stormy night two ships collided smashing horribly together. By the time it was sun rise the boats we jammed into the smooth hard sand on a nearby beach, the boats weren’t found for many years. Then one day it was found, by then the boats looked like a old rotted piece of wood in the shape of a boat. The bigger boat looked like it was pulling in the smaller boat. The boats were definitely never going to sail again, they were old brownish black and had holes in the bottom. The little boat looks like it is tied to something else, a single straight rope tied to something bigger much bigger it was the size of 63 ELEPHANTS!!!!!!!!! It was red yellow and bright blue, somehow it was in mint condition.That boat became a famous legend.

THE BOAT THAT SURVIVED

Next time I am going to try and use a bit more Nous and Adjectives.

Destination Zoo-Task 2 fact book mark

Destination Zoo-

Task 2 fact book mark

For reading and writing we are working on destination zoo one of the activity is a fact book mark we had to read about an animal then make a fact book mark I choose to do an otter here is my fact book mark.

This was a really fun activity next time I am going to do a elephant. Next time I am going to try and do neater writing.

Main star-Useful garden item

Main star-

Useful garden item

Main star-100 Piece Puzzle

Main star-

100 Piece Puzzle

Create a descriptive paragraph

Sadness

WALT: Create a descriptive paragraph

For writing we had to write a descriptive paragraph on emotions. We had the option of doing happy,sadness,playful and peaceful. Before doing the writing we did a activity where we wrote verbs and adverbs on different emotions. Here is my descriptive paragraph. I think I did a good job on using Making a story line to fit the verbs and adverbs in to. Next time I a m going to use stronger verbs and adverbs.

Jack was feeling blue because his friend has made him upset by taking his favourite toy. His Mum ask Jack if he is ok. He said “No I am not I am Upset” while crying loudly then crying quietly.

His Mum said “ you are so under weather. The friend of your has made you feel down”.

Respect for others

              Respect for others

This week my school is working on respect for others here are some of the things you have to do to respect other.