A Boat Story
For writing on Tuesday my Teacher gave us a photo and we had to use our imagination to write a paragraph. Then we had to high light all of our adjectives,nouns,verbs and adverbs in different colours here is the WALT, photo and my paragraph.
WALT: Use precise adjectives in our writing to add interest to our readers
My Paragraph
One Cold stormy night two ships collided smashing horribly together. By the time it was sun rise the boats we jammed into the smooth hard sand on a nearby beach, the boats weren’t found for many years. Then one day it was found, by then the boats looked like a old rotted piece of wood in the shape of a boat. The bigger boat looked like it was pulling in the smaller boat. The boats were definitely never going to sail again, they were old brownish black and had holes in the bottom. The little boat looks like it is tied to something else, a single straight rope tied to something bigger much bigger it was the size of 63 ELEPHANTS!!!!!!!!! It was red yellow and bright blue, somehow it was in mint condition.That boat became a famous legend.
THE BOAT THAT SURVIVED
Next time I am going to try and use a bit more Nous and Adjectives.
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